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"The world is big and I am small,
I am short and the world is tall.
The world is cruel and I am hurt,
The world is cold and full of dirt."


The melody of a children's song
Echoed through the empty floor
When the shadow of a former self
Marched towards that certain door.

Behind that door there was a short shelf,
Drawers unlocked by a key
Agile fingers had stolen before.
The lighter was found with glee.

"The world is big and I am small,
The world is too deaf for my call.
The world is cruel and turned away,
The world is cold and has to pay!"


Like ice the darkened walls did glisten
On the floor there was a lake.
The last canister soon was empty
And the pale hand did not shake.

With a soft hiss the flame's brought to life.
It stretched and began to dance.
A hand tried touching it tenderly
Staring eyes entered a trance.

"The world is big and I was small,
It never did love me at all.
But with you the tables will turn!
But with you my friend, it will
burn!"
:icondiluculi:
and the lighter fell...

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I may change the title once I found a better one. Any suggestions?
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:iconsutsuki-sensei:
Well, this is certainly...interesting and mildly creepy. lol Excellent piece Riddle!!
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:icondiluculi:
*Diluculi Dec 16, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thank you ^^
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:iconadonael:
~Adonael Dec 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
"Embers" or "Pyre"

In other news, good use of the rhyme scheme. I like how the refrain changes near the end and the bold word was effective in its delivery.
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:icondiluculi:
*Diluculi Dec 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thank you very much :)
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:iconadonael:
~Adonael Dec 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
No worries :)
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:iconcrimsonlegion:
well done my friend, congratulations :D
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:icondiluculi:
*Diluculi Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thank you very much :)
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:iconhockaloo:
For some reason this really seems like it could be a song. I love it soooooooooo much, though! And now I have it stuck in my head, in song form haha :D
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*Diluculi Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I would like to hear the melody :)
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:iconhockaloo:
Hehe it kind of changes every time I think of it! ^-^;
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