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"The world is big and I am small,
I am short and the world is tall.
The world is cruel and I am hurt,
The world is cold and full of dirt."


The melody of a children's song
Echoed through the empty floor
When the shadow of a former self
Marched towards that certain door.

Behind that door there was a short shelf,
Drawers unlocked by a key
Agile fingers had stolen before.
The lighter was found with glee.

"The world is big and I am small,
The world is too deaf for my call.
The world is cruel and turned away,
The world is cold and has to pay!"


Like ice the darkened walls did glisten
On the floor there was a lake.
The last canister soon was empty
And the pale hand did not shake.

With a soft hiss the flame's brought to life.
It stretched and began to dance.
A hand tried touching it tenderly
Staring eyes entered a trance.

"The world is big and I was small,
It never did love me at all.
But with you the tables will turn!
But with you my friend, it will
burn!"
and the lighter fell...

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I may change the title once I found a better one. Any suggestions?
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:iconvalerie-red:
Valerie-Red Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2014  New member Student Writer
this is lovely darling. it's beautifully written. I loved it! you have a lovely way of phrasing things.
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Diluculi Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you very much :rose:
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Valerie-Red Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2014  New member Student Writer
it's true. you're incredibly. really.
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:icondiluculi:
Diluculi Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
you just made my day. thank you very much!
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aalie Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2013  Student General Artist
I really enjoy how creepy this is. XD Very well written, my friend. :iconclapplz:
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Diluculi Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you very much :)
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aalie Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2013  Student General Artist
:iconmypleasuresignplz:
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Sutsuki-Sensei Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2012
Well, this is certainly...interesting and mildly creepy. lol Excellent piece Riddle!!
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:icondiluculi:
Diluculi Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thank you ^^
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Adonael Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
"Embers" or "Pyre"

In other news, good use of the rhyme scheme. I like how the refrain changes near the end and the bold word was effective in its delivery.
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