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Oh, you sad sad chimes stop singing
This awful tune of grief
For him the bell tolled and now's ringing
You mourn for my fiancé's thief
He paid for his crime with his life
My gun took his away
The woman I love will be my wife
So sad chimes, sing joyfully today

Oh you mourning chimes do sing on
And I will sing along
For him to grim death's sad melody
The victim of jelousy
My love for him became his doom
By the gun of my groom
Like the smoke his life faded away
Oh, you sad sad chimes sing on today

Oh you sad sad chimes will you fade
Today's a day of joy
Since at dawn two men met at the glade
And dead is who me does cloy
Roots entwine his corpse from now on
And women's arms no more
It's the righteous fate for this Don Juan
Whom I did so very much abhore

Oh you happy chimes stop your song
Joy is so very wrong
I can't forgive, can't forget the crimes
My groom committed, oh happy chimes
Hear my pleas, my cries, take my oath
My husband will lose both
His enemy as well as his wife
When tomorrow I will end my life

Oh you sad sad chimes sing again
This bitter tune of grief.
My wife fills a grave and me fills pain
The joyful time was too brief.
She rode over the heath today
But the horse did slip
Over a burrow on their way
Her neck broke with the crack of a whip
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Maybe assuming the events take place 18XX makes it easier to understand ;)
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You're such a talented writer! I love this. It flows so nicely and is quite unique as it reveals different people's viewpoints.
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*Diluculi Sep 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:iconspazhugplz:
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*Diluculi Sep 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much :iconspazhug:
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Mood: Joy =Radiant-Intention Sep 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is a wonderful poem. I love the way it is written and when I read it I feel from the perspective of the writer. Again, wonderfully done.
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*Diluculi Sep 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thank you very much :)
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=Radiant-Intention Sep 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You are welcome!
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Mood: Love ~DeeryDeerth Sep 13, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Wow. This is awesomely written. I love this! :D
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*Diluculi Sep 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thank you :)
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~DeeryDeerth Sep 14, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
You're welcome. :D
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~Contradictory55 Sep 13, 2012  Student Writer
It's interlacing points of view that are nearly confusing, but very very interesting, between a husband and his wife and their point of view of this third man who was killed by the husband...WOW.
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