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I sense there's something wrong despite
She hides sorrow with smiles so bright
And though I try so very hard
Can't lift the burden from her heart
How can his words induce this pain?

And does he notice the hurt he caused her?
And will he hear the words she cannot say?
I think I ought to tell

How will this end for my dear friend?
How will this sad love one day end?
Although the feelings are in place
Tears keep streaming down her face
Which I try to dry in vain

Oh, will we ever from hurting deter?
Oh, how I pray for joy to come one day
For this love to get well
:icondiluculi:
Some of you will notice, it's based on "Sally's Song" from the movie "A Nightmare Before Christmas".

Sadly, this is no fictional poem
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:iconsvitavotara:
Very beautiful and heart-warming :) It also reminds me of something, which makes it even more touching.
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*Diluculi Sep 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thank you very much :)
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:iconscrawlingafterlife:
You know... reading this poem made me think of "A Nightmare Before Christmas" so I think you hit that on the nail. I think this is a very good poem and oddly enough I find it easy to relate to. Great job.
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*Diluculi Sep 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much! :D
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~DeeryDeerth Aug 16, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
It's very lovely. I enjoyed reading it. :)
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*Diluculi Aug 16, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thank you :)
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~DeeryDeerth Aug 16, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
You're welcome. :D
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:iconleelu:
It's beautiful, and it goes to the melody of that song so well. I even tried singing it like that, it fits almost perfectly, though that might have been me misremembering notes...

Nightmare Before Christmas for the win. XD
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*Diluculi Aug 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :)
I wrote it while listening to the song over and over, but since I wanted rhymes, there's a little trade-off ^^;

aye! :highfive:
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