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From my dark room I see right
Into yours filled with light
Gossamer courtains frame the scene
Of you staring at your T.V. screen.

I have no need for T.V.
You're all I want to see
But there is that man by your side
Who doesn't deserve you, I wish he died

I watch you leaving for work
While in my room I lurk
Hours pass and patiently I wait
For you to return home about eight

I see him kissing your lips
And his cursed finger tips
Desecrating your skin so fine
You shouldn't be with him you should be mine!

I left my dark room and went outside
Wait in the shadows where I did hide
And I wait for you to walk by
The attack was quick, just a sigh
Was heard before you fell
Down, it all went so well
Now we're together, my dear
But why, why are you in fear?

Please forgive me gagging you
Something I had to do
Your screaming was so very loud
That's why to speak you are not allowed

What is wrong you look so sick
Is this another trick?
So you can try to get away
Just like you did on the other day

I'm sorry if this does hurt
But else I can't avert
That someone might take you from me
Your death is necessary, you see

From my dark room I can see
The place you used to be
The place where you are now as well
After you're freed from your carnal shell
Written for the 100 Themes Challenge, Varation 2:
No.25: Lurking
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I really like this poem, a well done portrait of the mind of a psychotic person who culminate his lust for the woman in her own death, a death he feels it's necessary for her release, her freedom and the only way he found to get her into his arms. You really went into his mind and expose his thoughts in a very particular way and in a very precise way as well.
There are little details you could have used and i think this poem could go even further and you could use it to turn it into a short story :D i think it would work awsomely. Very very nice work :clap:
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aymenjoe Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
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Diluculi Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thank you :)
kobaltkween Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
Very effective.
Diluculi Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thank you ^^
Svitavotara Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2012
Creepy but cool.
Diluculi Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thank you :)
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